December Workshop - Lavinia

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Lavinia Rookwood
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December Workshop - Lavinia

Postby Lavinia Rookwood » Tue Dec 29, 2015 10:04 pm

This is poem that has personal meaning to me that probably doesn't translate as well to someone who doesn't know me. Oh well, if I was going to suffer through this, might as well as make it for me to enjoy, no?


Memories Refractive

I live to read and read to live
It keeps my heart from tying knots
My memories are tainted by tales refractive.

Life was hard and so to thrive
I spent my life in books, life scattered through thought
I live to read and read to live

Chasing down my memories is not reflective
Trying to remember it all is for naught
My memories are tainted by tales refractive

Even now, my life is like a dying beehive
Years splintered through with blind spots
I live to read and read to live

Instead, I chase old stories to relive
Timeline built by books and made pretend together wrought
My memories are tainted by tales reflective

But though I forget, I am alive
And stories make for good maps, or so I am taught
I live to read and read to live
For my memories are tainted by tales reflective.
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Re: December Workshop - Lavinia

Postby Ariella McManus » Tue Dec 29, 2015 10:12 pm

As someone who knows the story behind the poem, it was all I could do to hold back tears. You were able to express so much through your words; one could almost feel the heartbreak behind them.

Without getting too much into the whys and wherefores, dissecting the poem itself, I find your phrasing to be both simple yet intensely complex. At first glance, it seems like the main focus of the poem is about your love of reading, but it turns out to be so much more. It shows the inner heart and the reason behind the love of books becomes the bigger theme. Well done!

I am honestly at a loss to offer any negative critique, as I have nothing bad to say about your poem. Other than the reasons behind it, I wouldn't change a thing.
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